I agree with Frazieme... the sponsor letter is way too long... even the cut-down version is too long. Your reasons for settling in the UK need not be more than 1 sentence.
My suggestion for the letter:
To the Entry Clearance Officer,
I am writing to sponsor my wife, Alyssa Guest, for a spousal settlement visa. I am a UK Citizen and have lived in the UK continuously since birth.
I am employed by the ...................., as a Senior Technician- Theatres & Events. I started the job on 12th October 2016 and earn an annual salary of £33,284. Therefore, as of 12th April 2017 I meet category A of the financial requirement and am including the relevant documentation to prove this.
When the visa is granted, my wife and I plan to live with my parents at their 4-bedroom house at the following address ..................................... With only my parents, myself and Alyssa living there, the home will not be overcrowded. The Land Registry document shows that the owner is the incumbent benefice, which is my father. I have included a copy of my father's licence for the church, along with a letter of permission from him.
Alyssa and I met on Royal Caribbean's Independence of the Seas cruise ship, where we both worked, on 5th July 2015, and entered into a relationship in October 2015. Since leaving the ship in November 2015, we have kept in regular contact using WhatsApp calls and messages. Alyssa visited me in the UK from January to July 2016 and we got engaged on 13th February 2016 in Minehead. I then flew to Texas for two weeks in August 2016. Alyssa took a short trip to the UK for New Years in December 2016 and then I returned to Texas in March 2017 where we married in Fort Worth, TX on 13th March 2017. We are choosing to settle in the UK together because we fit in very well here and really love this country.
Regards,
Edward Anthony Guest
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